Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Hurricane Lane (2018)/archive1: Difference between revisions

→‎Comments from JC: a few more, sorry!!
(→‎Comments from JC: I think I got everything)
(→‎Comments from JC: a few more, sorry!!)
– '''[[User:Juliancolton|<span style="font-family:Script MT Bold;color:#36648B">Juliancolton</span>]]'''&nbsp;&#124;&nbsp;[[User_talk:Juliancolton|<sup><span style="font-family:Verdana;color:gray;text-shadow:gray .2em .18em .12em">''Talk''</span></sup>]] 04:05, 3 May 2020 (UTC)
:Greatly appreciate the additional comments! I believe everything has been addressed. ~ [[User:Cyclonebiskit|Cyclonebiskit]] ([[User talk:Cyclonebiskit|chat]]) 21:55, 3 May 2020 (UTC)
 
;More
In the course of my final read-through, I found a few more things that tripped me up. I'm doing some minor editing for flow and clarity... if I've inadvertently changed the meaning of anything, feel free to revert. Comments in no particular order at this point:
*''On August 29, the Central Pacific Bank announced that it would provide natural disaster loans of $1,000–3,000 for any Maui residents who applied.'' - This does not faithfully represent the [https://www.mauinews.com/news/local-news/2018/08/mauis-lane-damage-could-run-up-in-the-millions-for-repairs/ source]. As far as I can tell, the loan program was available to the entire state (not just Maui), included amounts up to $10,000, not $3,000, and still included an application process - "any" resident was not automatically approved. Once again, it's entirely possible I've overlooking something important, but this is what I'm seeing right now.
*''FEMA ultimately provided nearly $2.5 million in public assistance.'' - [https://www.fema.gov/disaster/4395 Source] says nearly $10 million.
*''Residents observed fire whirls approximately 15 ft (4.6 m) tall.'' - Is there a way to make clear that only one person witnessed this?
*''it also burned 27 vehicles.[57]'' - Why is the NCDC event report used for most other fire-related figures, except this one?
I think that's about it. – '''[[User:Juliancolton|<span style="font-family:Script MT Bold;color:#36648B">Juliancolton</span>]]'''&nbsp;&#124;&nbsp;[[User_talk:Juliancolton|<sup><span style="font-family:Verdana;color:gray;text-shadow:gray .2em .18em .12em">''Talk''</span></sup>]] 16:59, 4 May 2020 (UTC)